2 Years ago today I was planing to go to concert, however, it was stupid expensive and I was hesitating. I had never been before in concert therefore, it was going to be my first experience. The singer was one of the most popular singers in Russia besides, his background was same as mine. We bought online tickets and we were counting days for that. When we got there we could not find a parking place. There were more than 2 thousands people and everyone was just screaming. I was surprised, at the same time, I was impressed by decoration  which was colorful and shining. Before entering we had a some troubles with tickets. We were told to wait. We had been waiting for 1 hour when I saw my friend in the top of the line. We had sneaked up behind him. Hopefully I didn’t spent much time in the line as I expected. Finally singer showed up and the concert was started. It was incredibly excited. Although, everything was fine, the singer suddenly fell down and everyone just start staring at him. The concert was stopped due to singer’s health problems. Apparently there was nothing to do with the health they just came up with the excuse to cover his shame. Obviously he was drunk or high, why would someone drink that much in the own concert. Surely I can’t judge anyone for anything but I spent money and I anticipate the best in return. Generally everything was in the high level and we enjoyed our time which I don’t regret.

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2 Years ago today __I was planing to go to concert. However, it was stupid expensive and I was hesitating. I had never been___ __ concert before.  Therefore, it was going to be my first experience. The singer was one of the most popular singers in Russia. Besides, his background was same as mine. We bought online tickets and we were counting days for that.

When we got there we could not find a parking place. There were more than 2 thousands people and everyone was just screaming. I was surprised, __at the same time, I was impressed by __ decoration  which was colorful and shining. Before entering we had a some troubles with tickets. We were told to wait. We had been waiting for 1 hour when I saw my friend in the top of the line. We had sneaked up behind him. Hopefully I didn’t spent __ much time in the line as I expected.

Finally __singer showed up and the concert was started. It was incredibly excited. Although, everything was fine, the singer suddenly fell down and everyone just start staring at him. The concert was stopped due to ___ singer’s health problems. Apparently there was nothing to do with the health. They just came up with the excuse to cover his shame. Obviously he was drunk or high. Why would someone drink that much in the own concert. Surely I can’t judge anyone for anything but I spent money and I anticipate the best in return. Generally everything was in the high level and we enjoyed our time which I don’t regret.

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